As I sit quietly, yet engrossed in my English class, I find it surprising how eager the students are to participate. It seems peculiar to me that each and every student has their own opinion and is given a fair chance to speak, regarding the fact that woman usually don’t have a say in much of anything. Although it is a change from what I’m used to, I relish in the opportunity to learn and engage in conversation with other prospective students such as myself. Despite the ambition to join in conversation with my peers, I feel different from them. They seem to all have a plan and are confident with the vividness of their life. Honestly, I sense that I’m going in various directions, spinning around wondering where I will end up in life. The fear building up in my head and all throughout my body takes over the necessary strength I have to gain in order to pay attention to anything. I’m finding that I want everything life has to offer, meanwhile realizing the want for absolutely nothing. The period ends while I’m simultaneously in my own world. My teacher announces the homework due for next class and I'm anticipating the approaching thoughts that will plunge into my mind next."Part of the quote by Sylvia Plath used in this blog--“Perhaps when we find ourselves wanting everything, it is because we are dangerously close to wanting nothing.”
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ReplyDeleteThis was a good entry. You really captured what she looks and sounds like. Your word choices are great too. Also, your sentence structure is very good it made her seem really edgy. Overall it was really good. The one thing I would just say is that you could have given a little more on her negativity. Like make her seem a little more "emo" if you know what I mean. You did a good job of that but make it feel as though she's really depressed. Otherwise it was really good!
ReplyDeleteHi Angie,
ReplyDeleteYou've chosen a great setting for Esther at KO, given that she is drawn to reading and writing. And, it fits her character to comment on the confidence and self-assurance girls in 2015 feel in the classroom. Try to go into more detail exploring why Esther is so torn and scattered. Whose expectations are limiting her? How are societal expectations in 2015 similar to those in the 1950s?