The school day begins with students mingling throughout the campus before class. Often students are unnoticably checked by teachers of their compliance to the dress code. After all, this is what the Combine works to create, similar people without flaw or expression. As the day goes on students may be “dress-coded” — this would infer their lack of compliance with the school’s code. Often this results in harsh punishment.
On the first day of school, a new student was brought in to the school. He was dressed in a t-shirt, shorts, and sneaker (4). He immediately stood out among the crowd of button down shirts and ties and blazers (4a). I remember noticing how large he was ; he nearly could not fit through\ the door. Immediately after managing his way in, teachers began to claw at him. Furious of his lack of respect for the dress code, teachers came at him with ties. “They are too tight on my throat,” he said as the teachers chased him with the ties.
He eventually walks himself to class shaking the hand of nearly every student on his way, including myself. As he shook my hand I noticed by arm begin to bulge. It was as if he was transmitting some kind of energy through his veins to my veins.
The teachers began to come at him again. He let go of my hand and directed himself toward their swarm.
He was eventually forced into accepting the tie. However, he never once put it on, merely draping it over his neck for the entire day.
1) Good description of how he refuses to wear the tie, and how he sees his arm begin to bulge as he shakes the boy's hand. Very good comparison/description of a McMurphy character.
ReplyDelete2) I like how you describe strong anathema for ties, which I'm sure many boys feel in real-life KO. I certainly know my brother felt that way when he went here.
3) I think the main difference between this piece and the Chief would be the syntax. You have a lot of his characteristic short sentences, but I think he would have some more sentences with long rants or just ideas mashed into one long paragraph. Also, I don't think he would use such language, like "infer", "mingling" etc. He has a much more colloquial manner of speaking.